托福寫作真題范文分享
2020-11-02
托福獨立寫作題目
“Do you think that one needs to take risks to finally reach success,or to keep cautious and careful and take risks less?”
Do you think that one needs to take risks to finally reach success【審題關鍵詞】,or to keep cautious and careful and take risks less?
寫作前請一定仔細審題,本題不是單純的比較“冒險”和“小心”,還有一個關鍵的限制是“目的在于最終獲取成功”,如果漏掉了這一關鍵信息,作文很可能出現不夠切題甚至徹底偏題的慘象。
寫作思路
敲黑板·劃重點
introduction不宜長,不宜在進入主題前做長篇累牘的繞彎或鋪墊。過度篇幅的introduction,尤其是鋪墊部分,會給讀者(即人類考官)制造閱讀壓力,打擊讀者的閱讀愿望,引起讀者的反感。
introduction的結構可能不是最基礎的“引入-論題-立場”結構。在introduction里可能會出現讓步內容(一種特殊的讓步內容位置),之后,作者可以通過轉折來表明自己的立場。
【本文的introduction就采用了內置讓步內容的方法】
Many people have the conception that they need to take risks to achieve success.This thought is provoked by the many inspiring stories where entrepreneurs,such as Bill Gates,Steve Jobs,dropped out of college and started their own businesses.Their bold moves are believed to be the key to their accomplishments.However,these successful individuals are the rare individuals.For the overwhelming majority of people,keeping cautious and careful is more rational.
信息流的順暢/文脈的建立,方式(暗線):指代
this thought---the conception名詞指代名詞
their bold moves---dropped out of college名詞指代動詞
本文的body部分被隱去
敲黑板·劃重點
conclusion也不宜長,不要在conclusion里過度重復body里的細節。
作為一個獨立的段落,有起碼兩句話才是“守規矩”的,不建議考生只寫一句話潦草收尾。
In conclusion,if a person’s goal is to achieve tremendous success,conservatism may be undesirable,because the greater is the risk,the greater is the reward.However,most people,whose objective is to secure moderate success,should keep cautious and careful.
不知道以上內容能否對您有些許幫助,如有托福備考相關問題可以在線咨詢環球教育老師,看見后第一時間為同學們解答疑問
環球教育秉持教育成就未來的理念,專注于為中國學子提供優質的出國語言培訓及配套服務。環球教育在教學中采用“九步閉環法”,幫助學生快速提升學習效能,同時提供優質的課后服務,跟進學生學習進程,為優質教學提供堅強的保障。目前,環球教育北京學校已構建了包含語言培訓、出國咨詢、國際課程、游學考察、在線課程等在內的一站式服務教育生態圈。相關問題可在線免費咨詢,或撥打免費熱線400-616-8800~~
北京環球天下教育科技有限公司 版權所有 課程咨詢熱線:400-099-7860
Copyright ? Copyright 1997 – 2025 m.eseea.cn All Rights Reserved. 京ICP備09100069號-4
市場合作申請